I’ve got a secret-Alondra Nieves

The idea is usually “Honesty is the best policy”, but the reality is that secrets cannot be kept with such honesty.There are not many times in my life where I have had put myself in a situation to lie–that is, thus far. This goes of course without saying the times where the secret I preferred to keep in secrecy was compromised to the the point where lying was the only option. One of them being during my first semester of college, which was my first of many other things; such as, living on my own, being four hours or more away from family or any source of supervision and of course my first college party/outing with friends. During this particular point in my newly established “adulthood”, I found myself hardly having to lie to my parents as I was more simply not saying the whole truth in itself. For example, “I am with my roommates in our room right now”,  although it was true, did not disclose the fact that were in our room getting ready to leave completely off campus. (CLASSIC)

However, the time were I was caught not sharing the entirety of my so called truth was when my mom had made an unexpected call that I felt I could answer and get away with–despite that I was already on the way to a party about forty minutes from campus. As all mothers do, she began to interrogate my intentions as to where I was going so late at night (10:30 PM),who was I with and why was I going there. I answered nervously because I realized that for once I had to lie to someone I had never felt the need to lie to before.  

The reality of the situation was that I was not on my way to friend’s off campus adult supervised house, I was not with people that I knew from highschool and I was not on the way to hang out and study. All of this was clearly understood by my mother even though she was 400 miles on the opposite of the peninsula. She began asking for names of who I was with (to which I gave of were old friends from back home that she had never met), my exact destined location( to which I described as fifteen to twenty minutes off campus) and if I had class the next day (to which I replied that it had been canceled).  After enough convincing, she had no choice but to submit to the lie I had created and once we ended the phone call the mixed feelings I had were that of relief, slight guilt and most of all a sense of  empowerment that fueled my mentality that my secret would be secure. STRONG ANALYSIS OF YOUR FEELINGS ENTWINED IN THE LIES. It was the feeling that was unfamiliar but at the time it was the only way to hide the truth that could not be revealed to a mother whose nest is almost empty as it is.

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In End of Solitude

When reading the article, “The End of Solitude”, Deresiewicz’s perspective of the decline in our society’s desire for solitude can be seen through everyday life especially in our modern society. At first, I could not understand what Deresiewicz’s meant when he was describing the new fears of our current society saying, “But we no longer live in the modernist city, and our great fear is not submersion by the mass but isolation from the herd.” Then, it was when I realized that it is the same as a more current translation of just simply fear of missing out. Whether this be of knowing of current topics, social media, the weather or even the news around the world–not knowing is the “fear” we experience as a society. It is the connectivity of our world that seems to fuel our constant “skimming” minds as we go through different websites even if we are not absorbing what we are reading or seeing. It has come to the point where our need for just being connected has dictated any source of solidarity that could give us space from the constant information streaming from our fingertips. GOOD INSIGHT  It was when I separated myself during the partial solitude did I begin to realize that actuality of the Deresiewicz article. I was not anxious but I was definitely at a feeling of loss. I was lost in conversation during most interactions and it was in those moments that I noticed how often we reference these interactions with what see on the internet or what we hear on the media. Even when it came to weather, the constant raining and humidity would be a surprise. I began to really analyze how much others were constantly connecting themselves around me and how it would make me feel like I needed to be connected as well. My solidarity made more interested in pursuing interactions with others to hear what I seem to be missing. It made me realize how much happens within 48 hours and how little we spend time discussing it before the next update happens.  GOOD It was almost as if my world was made quiet without my phone or laptop notifications keeping me up to date with news stories or celebrity happenings or the new events happening in the area. Usually on an afternoon alone in my apartment, I would browse or skim through multiple applications and from there decide what I would do next. During this solitude however, I felt myself substituting these normal activities for other social things so I would at least feel like I am interacting with others in some way and be updated on what was going. In all, my “solidarity” lacked isolation from others–which made me understand the perspective of the concept of how being alone has become less desirable. In this case, it is almost like we avoid being alone until we truly feel like we have had enough. There is we seem to appreciate “alone time” but the division of such alone time does not compare to how often we seek constant information. SEPARATE PARAGRAPHS

Nikita Borisenko 48-hour News Blackout

To start with, this 48 hours news blackout wasn’t challenging for me. As a matter of fact, I prefer to avoid watching or reading news on daily basis. About once a week when I have enough free time on my hands I may search for something specific. Possibly because of that habit it will be hard for me to observe real difference between being up to date and being cut off form news world, yet I will explain why I started doing that.

First, I noticed that listening to the news on daily basis makes me anxious, and I spend much more time thinking about what happened somewhere far away and discussing news with my friends, yet this discussion reminded more of the “here’s my opinion on this matter” conversation, where people where throwing their thoughts at you based on there moral and little knowledge of the event limited by the information presented by news. So, not only the time spent “discussing” new events was unproductive, it also was the time one could you use for solitude. Among many things, when I was avoiding news, I noticed that in my head I come back to the thoughts that were slipping my mind before. I started to meet with my friends only once or twice a week (of course when I wasn’t in school), and since I never truly was interested in Facebook, twitter and other social media I was pretty much cut off from the world, spending my time reading or just staring though the window.

One of the biggest things that started happening is that I started to understand science like never before. If before I would just memorize the formula or term and use it during the exam, now I could break it down and make sense out of it. Thus, solitude allowed me to think on my own rather than accept ideas of others as one and only reality. It also, lead me to notice that news will change based on the media that you use, thus I concluded that all of the media is biased. The news create a big intrusion of our solitude, or rather news of our time, because on daily basis we have to deal with unstoppable influx of news throughout the day, television at home, radio in your car, newspaper at work, your friends telling you what they heard or saw somewhere, simply overhearing conversation of other people who discussed events of the last week. GOOD ANALYSIS.

Overall, we receive a lot of information (in its raw form) yet we don’t process it ourselves, but take it in as a ready product. And that what leads people to make bad decisions. Something that was meant to be ultimate good became evil. Instead of making people smarter and well informed, this constant income of news created robots that will receive information and will replay it back at you, without processing it. Thus, solitude is the necessary tool for ones thinking abilities. It is the solitude that will allow men to look in their mind and learn (or at least try to understand) how to use. DIFFERENT APPROACH TO ASSIGNMENT BASED ON A VERY DIFFERENT PERSPECTIVE. GOOD JOB.

Alondra Nieves-Rhetorical Analysis

Thesis: The ideas behind the reliability of our memory cannot be restrained by a single concept but rather multiple theories as to how it may function based on the person and how it accurately or incorrectly it can be proven to be. GOOD

When analyzing the argument of Chabris and Simons’ “Why Our Memory Fails Us”, it was apparent that the foundation of their perspective depended on the overall justification of the reality of what had really happened in the events discussed in their article. They build their case by breaking down the process of what we remember and how we choose the pieces that construct the memory we see fit to our version of the truth. Relying heavily on the appeal to rationality otherwise known as logos LOGOS, both Chabris and Simons supported this ideal with past mistakes made by public figures such as Neil Tyson and former president George W. Bush. Recalling how Dr. Tyson “misremembered” a statement made by Bush referring to 9/11 and how Bush himself did not correctly remember specific incidents that occurred the same day, the tone of the article remained unbiased when discussing the person whose memory failed but remained consistent in supporting the claim as to why both examples had failed for similar reasons. NEW PARAGRAPH The top three comments of the article itself from the “Readers Picks” also received popularity on the opinions about such memory failure but through different perspectives themselves. The first of the comments being made by Neil Degrasse Tyson himself, supporting the claims made in the article that he had recognized the mistakes in his memory by having “nothing further to add or subtract” [from the article]. He then also added links to where he personally discusses the matter, appealing again with a pathos PATHOS approached. The second comment by Keith Dow brings up to question of the claim “Dr. Tyson, Mr.Bush and Mrs.Clinton are all intelligent and educated people” specifically attacking the idea of Mr.Bush falling under these characteristics, as he used a combination of direct quotes (logos) and the emotional opinion(pathos) of how he believes Mr.Bush being considered intelligent is “faulty”. The last of the top three comments made by Jacob Sommer takes a more forgiving and ethical approach as to the process of “misremembering” and how the mistakes can be looked past as long as they are met by the person who made them with humility and acknowledgement of their mistake. The top three picks as far as the NYT Picks are written without such specific allusions to the article’s examples of “misremembered” memories without evidence to support their opinions. The first one focuses more on training the human mind to understand and “accepting these fallibilities” of our imperfect memory. The next contradicts the article as a whole by overall disagreeing that human memory is not at fault but rather “mental laziness”, while the last of the three appears to be unbiased and instead provides an example of another way a memory can be “misremembered.” Ultimately, I do not find the NYT approach to rankings effective and is in-fact unneeded. UNNECESSARY A highly ranked comment is better left to the public to attract the most attention toward.

GOOD PARAGRAPHS NEED TO BE SEPARATED AND ETHOS WAS NOT ADDRESSED

Katie Cohen- Rhetorical Analysis

         How rhetorical analysis is used to argue different points on a topic. FRAGMENT

 

         In the article entitled, “Why Our Memory Fails Us” by Christopher F. Chabris and Daniel J. Simons, they talked about the different ways our memory is challenged. Our memory and how we recall past events can highly be affected by many factors as I learned in this article. They spoke a lot about the emotional appeal towards our memory. WHAT CONCEPT IS THIS? Our memory can be affected by how we felt emotionally towards that specific event. Specifically for example, our “flashbulb memories” of emotionally heavy events can be the most innacurate because we have a bias towards that event. In my opinion, the author relies heavily on facts and uses logos to construct his argument. He brings up facts and quotes from Dr. Tyson, Mr. Bush, and even events from 9/11. They talk about proven events where our memories have failed us, so much so, that it has lead to false convictions and even death sentences. Later on in the argument, they focus on the case study by Henry L. Roediger III and K. Andrew DeSoto. They tested people’s memory by using words from a list. AVOID USING “THEY TALK”.

        The top three comments that were chosen under the NYT picks really grasped a great understanding of this article. One of the comments gave a personal example of how his professor tested their memory in the beginning of class and was able to prove some of the examples from the article. Even though the class had an understanding of what the professor told them, the details each student wrote down were very different. The second comment disagrees with the authors. He lets readers look at the topic from a different perspective. I feel that they were chosen as the top three comments because they all had different stand points and used different methods to get their opinions across.

         I think the difference between the reader’s choice top picks and the NYT top picks for comments are filtered much differently. In my opinion, the NYT top three comments were a little more sensored. Even though they showed disagreements with the author and article, they were still kept at a few sentences. I think the reader’s choice comments had more freedom in what they were saying. Someone’s comment from the reader’s choice tab challenged the actual author’s memory. This reader’s comment stated that his memory on Mr. Bush were faulty. Then, the reader used many different quotes to back up his argument. The reader’s comments were also a little more biased towards their emotions. One specific commenter commented on how he personally felt towards Mr. Bush. He was almost offended that the author used him as an example to get his point across about memory. This obviously altered the way this specific commenter felt about the whole article. Overall, after analyzing the rhetorical triangle, Pathos, Ethos, Logos, and the “Why Our Memory Fails Us” article, I was able to see that the article mainly focused on the Logos appeal. The authors relied on quotes, logic, and events to argue their point of view.

Rhetorical Triangle Thais Marques

Thesis statement: The rhetorical triangle is used in most readings by authors to get the reader to believe their argument over anyone else. WHAT DO YOU MEAN BY USED?

Rhetorical analysis plays a big part in the article “Why Our Memory Fails Us” by Christopher F. Chabris and Daniel J. Simons. They talked a lot about how our memory is challenged. The authors however used two different ways to support their argument. Pathos and logos were used a couple times in the article. The rhetorical triangle consists of different persuasive strategies that authors use to persuade their reader in believing what the are saying is true or just to get the reader to agree. Pathos is appeal to emotions or feelings while logos is appeal to logical reasoning. Ethos is an ethical appeal. WE KNOW THAT BUT HOW WERE THEY APPLIED? However, ethos is not used in this reading compared to logos and pathos. In this article, it is explained that our memory can be affected by many factors including emotion.

Christopher F. Chabris and Daniel J. Simons spoke a lot on how memory can be affected by how someone felt emotionally at the time of the event. Heavy emotional events play a part when trying to remember something that happened. It changes the way you remember things which makes it the most inaccurate. People tend to be bias towards which ever event due to their feelings. GOOD The authors used pathos when they explained the reasoning behind why Dr. Tyson thought he remembered something that Bush said but it happened to be incorrect. It happened to incorrect because Dr. Tyson thought he remembered Bush saying specially something but it was just his memory challenging him. 9/11 was a big horrific event so it impacted Dr. Tyson’s memory due to his feelings toward the event. Logos is also used in this article and the authors relies on facts to construct their argument. GOOD ANALYSIS

Facts were given out through out the article on 9/11, Mr Bush, and Dr Tyson. They gave out examples of proven events where failure to remember occurred and was challenged. They use these facts to help out police and the topic of witnesses and how much their memory can be affected. They gave out facts on the case study by Henry L. Roediger III and K. Andrew DeSoto which was about testing memory by using words from a list and trying to remember the words after studying them. It turned out that the people with the most certainty and confidence are the ones that were wrong remembering some words. So the study showed that people with the most confidence has the most failure to remember. These facts help the authors with sounding like they know what they are talking about. People are more likely to believe and agree.

The top three comments that were chosen under the NYT picks really helped me have a better understanding of this article. One of the comments was someone who agreed with the authors and shared a different perspective about memory through his own experience. This helped me with understanding the argument better through someone else’s thoughts. The second comment disagrees with the authors. He lets readers look at the topic from a different perspective. He comments that people should are more likely to remember something if they are confident which I do not agree with because of the facts given prove otherwise. The third comment was another person agreeing with the authors and giving their own example of poor memory due to emotion. I feel that they were chosen as the top three comments because they all had different stand points and beliefs either agreeing or disagreeing. They used their own experiences to get what they are saying across.

I think the reader’s choice top picks and the NYT top picks for comments are really different. In my opinion, the NYT top three comments were a little more accurate and more detailed. I think the reader’s choice comments had more freedom in what they chose to say. Some didn’t even have anything to do with the article itself. Someone’s comment from the reader’s choice said that loss of memory can be a good thing at times. They were more personal opinions. The reader’s comments are more biased because they use their emotion to justify what they are saying. One of them talked about Mr. Bush and how he disagrees with what he did to this country and how they feel towards Mr. Bush.GOOD

After analyzing the rhetorical triangle,  and understanding Pathos, Ethos, Logos, and how it was used in the article “Why Our Memory Fails Us”, I was able to see that the article mainly focused on the Logos appeal and it how used quotes, facts, logic and events to share their The authors relied on quotes, logic, and events to prove their argument.

 

OVERALL GOOD.  UNNECESSARY DEFINITION OF TERMS WHICH MAY BE WHY THIS IS 300 WORDS OVER THE WORD COUNT.

Nikita Borisenko Assignment 1

Chabris and Simons employs the rhetorical appeals of logos and ethos effectively, although their emotional appeal might be hard to notice, yet it present their and well appeal to higher emotion. All three combined creates an effective argument for the statement that our memory fails us and we need to accept our mistakes.

Chabris and Simons started their article with an example of how memory can fail even in an intellectual person without any memory disorders (e. g. Alzheimer’s, amnesia, Parkinson’s, etc.). This way they showed with an actual example (i.e. fact) that memory can in fact fail us, so they appealed to logos right away. Throughout the article they’ve been heavily relying on logical appeal by presenting the facts from the recent history, which show that one might forget or change (in his/her own mind) their experiences, or rather memory of it. For example, Dr. Tyson fusing two separate memories into one and making statement on a “new” falls memory, Mr. Bush recalling seeing something he only heard about, and Mrs. Clinton remembers being shot at, when shooting was happing far away from her. On top of that, they’ve presented results from different experiments by psychologists on memory recall abilities. That was Roediger III and DeSoto study of how recollection bound to confidence and Bartlett’s experiment based on “telephone” game.
Their ethos is as strong as it can get. ODD WORDING, CAN ETHOS BE STRONG? Both authors of this article have Ph.D. in psychology, both are professors of psychology and both doing extensive researches on topic of psychology. Not to mention that Dr. Simons had been part of expert panel assigned by National Academy of Sciences to research how witness recollection could be improved or tested (since those testimonies might decide lives of people). Overall, both Chabris and Simons are well qualified to discuss and show their opinions on the topic of memory, even though that the tone of the article was rather casual, than professional. [NEW PARAGRAPH SPACE]
The appeal to pathos was more “between the lines” in comparison to logos and ethos. However, the appeal for higher emotion was there (admitting ones mistake and being fair to others). As you read article, you can see the reason why this article was written, which is understanding that one most likely doing honest mistake rather than lying to you on purpose and the one who is mistaken should be able to see facts and admit his/ her own mistakes, this way people would be fair to each other, more forgiving and more open minded. “It is just as misguided to conclude that someone who misremembers must be lying as it is to defend a false memory in the face of contradictory evidence.” (Chabris & Simons, 2014). GOOD

First top readers comment was by Dr. Tyson, so I think I was found most convincing because of credibility. The second comment is just an opinion supported with “fact-check,” yet I fail to find reason why was it found as a good one. Third comment very well appealed to pathos, as commentator appeal to ability to forgive and be more understanding as well as logos by presenting examples from his own experience. GOOD

Two of the comment were among top 10 NYT choices. However, the top three picks of NYT were well constructed, were well bound to article thesis and showed constructive arguments. Overall, NYT choose based on productivity of the comment. It is needed, because those good comments can simple be lost in multitude of bad ones. TRUE, GOOD