Lying by Hanai Garcia

Lying, if done out of complete necessity, is a valid reason to avoid consequences.

When I got my first job at a five star restaurant I was eager to please. I answered phones, took reservations, and cleaned my workstation constantly. Being the youngest employee at just 18, my higher ups were impressed with my work ethic. They trusted me with many things including giving me the keys to open the offices after hours. I enjoyed working there more than anything.

I had a supervisor every night named Andrew. He would watch me like a hawk and wait for me to make the slightest mistake. I would always be doing my job correctly so he could never say something to me. But Andrew was also a perfectionist and he never made a mistake. His orders always came out perfect and when he took reservations the guests were always satisfied. He was a very snarky man and if I ever asked a question he would make sure to answer condescendingly. Andrew annoyed me often with his comments and behaviors.

On a busy Saturday night in the middle of season Andrew got a call from the Rittenhouse family. Whenever they came to dine at the restaurant they would always get the best table and the best service because they would leave a huge tip. So like any manager would he booked their reservation ahead of all the other diners that evening. But what he didn’t realize was that I already booked the restaurant owner’s family for the same night a week earlier.

The shift went on as normal, the Rittenhouse family arrived on time and were sat at a huge table in the middle of the dinning room. Andrew was prancing around the kitchen talking about how he was able to book the Rittenhouse’s table on such short notice that they will most definitely leave hundreds of dollars as a tip. In that moment the owners of the restaurant, the Smiths, walked in. If you know about the restaurant business you would understand that in a small restaurant, having two very large parties is a problem, for both staff and guests. So Andrew panicked that he didn’t notice the error.

The error could have been mostly mine. And he screamed at the top of his lungs asking who booked the Smiths for dinner tonight. I did not answer him. And when he asked me specifically I had to say no. Andrew is such a hot head that he would fire me on the spot and not take into account how much I do for the restaurant or all my other good qualities as a worker. I lied to my manager about who made the reservation and lucky for me my shift was over before I could see how he solved the situation.

I learned from my mistake despite not suffering any consequences. Lying was the only solution to this situation. GOOD STORY AND EXAMPLE BUT YOU COULD HAVE ANALYZED THE SECRET A BIT MORE.

 

 

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Secrecy Ashley Navarro

Thesis: When a secret is being kept because you’re trying to protect someone, it does not mean it will keep them from pain.

When I was in thirteen, my great-grandfather passed away. This happened on a weekday, in the morning. My sibling had school, but I did not. I was there for my grandfather’s death, but my siblings were not. My younger sisters are six years younger than me, so they were around 7 years old. That night, my sisters had a school performance, and my mom decided it was best to tell them after their show was over.

This meant I had to keep a secret that was so detrimental to anyone who it would affect for a whole day, and that’s what I had to do for my little sisters. I was able to pour my tears down my face and know that someone I loved had just passed. I was already grieving. I knew the pain that I would have, but I also know the pain that it would cause my sisters. I could see in their young eyes the way they looked at the world. No fear, no sadness, just pure joy. And by the end of the day, I knew that I would be taking that away from them.

The power that I had over my sisters was immense. From one second to the next, I could change the whole perspective of the world, at just seven years old. It wasn’t a good power to feel. It was a control that was given to me, but I wanted no part in. I could see them on the stage so happy to perform, thinking their life was as perfect as it could be, which is how any seven -year -old should feel. But the moment they got off the stage, little did they know, that’s when they would find out that life isn’t as perfect as the once thought.

As we entered the car, I remember my mom and I taking a deep breath, almost as if we were sharing the secret and the power within each other for one last time. My mom started with telling them, and then I had to finish because my mom was to heartbroken to finish. It was like we had shared the power, and then she gave it all to me at that moment.

Before I could even finish my sentence, my sisters started to cry. At first, I was relieved that I no longer had to keep the secret of my great-grandfather to myself anymore. Now we all shared the grief, but that made me powerless too, because I could not protect two little girls from the pain of the real world. In this situation, no one wins. Not the secret keeper, and not the people you’re keeping it from. VERY STRONG WRITING AND EXCELLENT WORK

Forty-Eight Hours Alone

During this forty-eight hour period without the means of technology, I knew it was going to be a large challenge before starting it. As Deresiewicz describes, due to the evolution of technology, it is impossible to feel alone. I spend the majority of my time scrolling down multiple social media feeds, texting, calling, or Face-Timing. Being a social individual, my group of friends and I are all usually doing something together every day of the week. Whether it be going out to party or staying in having a game night, the majority of our time is spent around one another. With that being said, cutting off all communication was excruciating. I woke up Tuesday and Wednesday morning with the instinct of checking my phone for all messages, emails, and to catch up on my social media feed. Stopping myself from doing so felt strange. Throughout both days I found myself constantly trying to reach for my phone wondering if anyone had messaged me, if maybe I had missed something important, or if anyone noticed that I was gone which in reality made me feel anxious beyond comparison. With the large amount of influence technology has on my life, needing to know what was going on with the world and not being able to be aware made me feel sick to my stomach. I am constantly bombarded with news stories by video or photos on all social media apps I have making it a very important part of my day to check those pages for current information. Reflecting upon that during my solitude, I realized it would just make me more alone. Thinking about the events that affect us daily, I noticed I reflect on my own distancing myself from my friends because I believe my opinion and thoughts on public matters is not one to share for fear of feeling unaccepted due to my views. I did the only things I could think of to try and fill the void of being without my phone so I began to read and work out at home. Which would only allow me to be distracted for a short period of time before I would do chores around the house to stop me from going mad. As the day set into night, I found myself feeling alone. I could not wait for my parents and siblings to come home so I could have some communication. Thankfully the forty-eight hours are over, and I can get back to being part of society again.

SEPARATE PARAGRAPHS.

Solitude Ashley Navarro

As I began my 48 hours of solitude, I was finding myself at ease. More often than not, I usually have days of solitude, where I purposely don’t charge my phone and it stays dead for a long period of time. I believed this experiment wouldn’t be any different than any other random day of no phone. But to play the game fair, I charged my phone the night before and left it in a corner. Knowing that your phone cannot be used because it doesn’t work, is different than not using your phone just because. DEDICATION.

As the days went by, I started to examine the world around me and even myself. I started to really want to know what everyone on my Instagram and snapchat was doing during the weekend. I even started to cringe a little. When I started to feel this way, I stopped and made myself answer the question: “Why? Why do you care what 800 people are doing?” I started to realize, half those people I don’t really know to care what they are doing, and the other half, if I really wanted to know, why didn’t I reach out to them, person to person to see what their plans were. GOOD.

After the first day, it was normal to not have my phone on me. It did make communicating a little harder, but I just had to make a few extra steps to get what I needed instead of instant response. Sometimes, I see this world as such a fast pace, in a hurry type of environment. We’re always thinking about what’s going to happen, instead of living in the actual moment. Is that why we’re always glued to the news? Because we wish we could be somewhere we weren’t? If we want to be somewhere else, then why don’t we just do what we want? Everything is moving so fast around us, we can’t appreciate what’s really going on and essentially missing parts of our lives that could be so much more impactful than anything we see on our phones.

When Deresiewicz, talked about how boredom is closely aligned with loneliness that really opened my eyes. What constitutes someone as being bored? Is it that whatever you’re doing isn’t entertaining? So then I go out and buy an object that will fill the void. We’re all so consumed to not be bored, but is it just a cover up to say that we don’t want to be lonely?

I’m starting to realize that people, especially me. Are afraid of solitude because it’s sometimes mistaken for loneliness. In society, if you’re lonely or a loner, you’re automatically marked as weird or an outsider. People are afraid to be alone, and after these two days I had to ask myself, “Am I one of those people?” I like to have people around me, but let me be more specific. I like to have friends and family around me to share in the wonders of life and go through milestones with. I don’t need random people sharing them with me, because I’m almost positive they don’t care as much. Yes, the technology we have is an amazing invention. We’re able to communicate with people in places far beyond. But im wondering if its necessary to have it in our everyday lives that it takes over our everyday lives. The 60’s and 70’s were such a simpler time. Is it because they didn’t have the pressures of social media to compete with others around us? I now truly rather live practical life with some solitude, than be in the rush and competition of social media. EXCELLENT JOB.

Laura Lopez

The idea that the current generation aspires to be like “miniature celebrities” is was stuck with me throughout William Deresiewicz, “The End of Solititude.” We constantly have to share what we are doing, with a tweet or a Snapchat, and if we did not post on Instagram or Facebook what we did this weekend, then did we really do anything? We use outlets like these to share every detail with our followers, validating ourselves. The amount of followers we have, gives us further validation, and as a user of social media, I can relate to that argument.

When I get a notification of a new friend request, there is a feeling of excitement and satisfaction. I am one friend request closer to reaching 1,000 followers on Instagram, and once I reach 1,000, I aspire for 1,500 followers. What Deresiewicz brings to my attention, is how many of those followers are actually my friends? I spend my free time on these social media outlets, informing them of my personal life, and keeping up with theirs. I recognize that fear of being alone, that Deresiewicz speaks about, within myself. For example, one of my least favorite things, is eating lunch alone on campus. If I cannot find anyone to accompany me, I spend the entire lunch break on my phone while eating. Although I am not with those people physically, I am still connected to them virtually, and it helps me to not feel alone.

I recognized this habit before I read Deresiewicz’s reading, but not until I read his article and the instructions for this assignment, did I really want to experiment my level of constant connectivity. I was going on a trip over the weekend, so I figured being out of Miami would be the best opportunity to completely disconnect for 48 hours. I had an itinerary for my trip and company of a friend, so I was not bored, or looking for my phone for entertainment throughout the day. It was when we would get to our hotel room for the rest of the night, where I was tempted to open up my Instagram and see what everyone else did that day. I also enjoy watching the nightly news, and I feel like it is important to keep myself informed, so that was another struggle.

I was not as concerned with not having access to my social media, as much I was with the news. The news is like my nightly ritual, where I learn what happened around the world and within my own community for that day. The news is necessary to stay informed of important things going on in our society. Being informed allows us to connect with others as well, in a more positive way than social media. I recognize the importance of social media as well, and how positive it can be, to be able to connect with others instantly around the world, but being able to connect on importantly worldly issues is extremely valuable. In times like these, after the Vegas shooting, where I question humanity, seeing the amount of love from around the world connecting through news and media, it trumps the amount of hate that one person tried to inflict on the world. VERY WELL WRITTEN. GOOD ANALYSIS. GREAT JOB.

Analyzing Rhetoric – Ashley Navarro

Thesis: Being a credible author can only be done if the work is appealing to rhetoric. Chabris, Simmons, and the comments appeal to logos and pathos in their written work.

In “Why Our Memory Fails Us”, Christopher F. Chabris and Daniel J. Simons argue that most of the time a person’s memory is not accurate because of the combining of two separate events or it could be that emotions take over and clouds the person’s perception of an event.

Chabris and Simmons build their case by providing anecdotes and examples to show how one’s memory is affected. The authors use logic and pathos to get the readers to trust and accept what they are saying.

In some instances, the authors rely on facts to get the point across to the readers. For example, on Neil Tyson’s television show, “Cosmos,” Tyson confused two speeches President Bush did . One was based on how Muslims are not our enemy and the other was about the astronauts who lost their lives. The authors explained how Tyson mixed the two speeches because of the lack of recall. He could have easily researched the speech he was referencing, but he was so confident in that he was right that he didn’t fact check. Chairs and Simmons also provided research where people who are overly confident of their recall could still be completely wrong. Even flash bulb memories, where we see flashes of our past, could be completely remembered wrong. The research also proved that every time we remember a memory, we could potentially be remembering it a completely different way each time. The authors are provide logic to the audience which is making their claim that memory fails us credible and believable.

In another case, the authors also rely on the audience’s emotions. In some of their anecdotes and examples, they use familiar items, such as the infamous childhood game of “Telephone” and the Showtime Series “The Affair.” this targets the audience’s childlike self and their adult binge worthy television shows . It gets the audience to relate to what they are claiming because they can familiarize themselves and others into that situation.

The authors tone is very empathetic and positive towards this problem. They are aware there is a problem, but they know that it is not necessarily anyone’s fault. They seem to believe that it is just something that minds do and as humans just need to be aware that the mind could be failing humans.

In the reader’s pick comments, the top three comments were all based solely on facts and even had proof to the writer’s reason. Two out of the three writer’s had links to support their claims, and one write even quoted to discuss his belief that different from the authors’ claims. The New York Times’ picks were quite different. There was no facts to support their claims, but they each had a different perspective on the article. Each approach is effective because each type brings more research and knowledge to the table as well as each perspective.

 

GOOD BUT MORE EXAMPLES OF CONCEPTS IN READINGS NEEDED. MORE EVIDENCE-BASED ARGUMENT AND LESS SUMMARY.

Laura Lopez

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If commenters think before they type and simply want to learn more and engage in the cyber world, then commenting can be extremely beneficial when addressing authors, instead of discouraging.

 

Aristotle’s Rhetoric Triangle is all about persuasion. There are many forms of persuasion, which he categorized as logos, ethos, and pathos. These have been set in place for centuries, as a way to persuade and lead society. In Krystal D’Costa’s “Don’t Read the Comments” she introduces the idea of how the web allows readers to share their ideas with zero boundaries, as a way to persuade other viewers, or to simply entertain themselves. Christopher F. Chabris and Daniel J. Simons also speak about commenting within the social media world, in their article “Why Our Memory Fails Us.” What both these authors have in common, is their focus on comments made towards public speakers, and setting a tone of sympathy for their fellow author’s.

I myself, am not an avid commenter, so the articles brought my attention to the ups and downs of commenting. It is so easy for us to give in our input and communicate directly with the author instantly through the web, letting them know what we think. Commenting is also becoming irrelevant though. So many people, with so many opinions, that are often harsh or filled with invented facts, and are constantly posting comments. Authors do not want to waste their time reading information that is false, ignorant, and discouraging. If authors on the internet with high volume audiences are constantly getting frustrated with their comment boxes, then they will disregard them all together, making them useless.

D’Costa, Chabris and Simons, focus on the harsh audience in their articles, and sympathize with the authors. Especially in Chabris and Simons piece, they give the example of a credible astrophysicist Neil Degrasse Tyson. The quote that Tyson claimed to remember perfectly from Bush’s 9/11 speech, actually came from a speech given for Colombia, after their space shuttle explosion. Commenters challenged him on this quote, which he swore he remembered perfectly, but he was proven false. He immediately corrected his statement and apologized. They also compare Tyson story to Bush’s own story, where Bush was ridiculed for making a quoting error on his own speech as well. As I read the article, I thought to myself, “Poor Tyson and Bush genuinely believed what they were proclaiming, and when they were proven wrong they did the right thing.” I was on Tyson and Bush’s side, not my fellow commenters.

I believe their purpose was to shine a light on how we need to be more aware of what we comment, because another human is reading them on the other side of the computer screen. Humans make mistakes, that is why they repeatedly address Tyson and Bush’s scenarios as “memory failures” and “confidence”, because they were not purposefully lying. Their errors should be corrected though, by respectfully recognizing and supporting our interest with facts.  The website shout-outs the top three comments, which I found to be humorous, light-hearted, and siding with the fact that humans make mistakes.

DID NOT ADDRESS CONCEPTS IN THE RHETORICAL TRIANGLE  AS APPLIED TO ARTICLES OR THE STRUCTURE OF NYT COMMENTS