I’ve got a secret

[Introduction not needed. Relate these points to the story.] There comes a time in everyones [punctuation: everyone’s] life that at least once, they are asked to keep a secret in order to protect someone or just because you were confided in. Let me start by saying that this is no easy task, especially for me. Some may say it’s because I’m Cuban and it’s in my nature to want to gossip, but sometimes I can’t help but have to agree with them. I love to share information [comma] and I say share because I don’t gossip as to spread things about others, I just share what I know.

[Introduction not needed. Relate these points to the story.] If it comes down to keeping secrets, I can do that as well, [period mark] I’m known to be trustworthy, but there are just some secrets that are too difficult to keep especially when you’re caught in the middle and can’t say anything. I guess my situation was more of a high school cheating scandal. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph.] By my senior year in 2013, I had been in a relationship for 3 years already and it was going strong. My boyfriend and I were doing well and we didn’t have many issues back then. Now I start off by saying this because we were a prime example and were known as an ideal couple at school on the contrary to the couple we used to hang out with. [Relate the insights to the readings and lectures.]

The other couple was a nice couple, but one of them being the guy could just never stay faithful. Don’t get me wrong, to this day I feel awful about not having been able to say something to the poor girl about what her boyfriend was doing, but I just couldn’t. The problem here was that the guy was my boyfriends [punctuation] best friend, so we met his girlfriend through him. She was an all around very nice girl, but he didn’t respect the relationship. I was told countless times that I couldn’t get between their relationship because then maybe it would ruin the friendship. There’s no worse feeling than knowing someone is hurting another person emotionally and not being able to do or say anything about it. [Relate the insights to the readings and lectures.]

The girl became a good friend of mine and she even only [slang. Write in essay form.] lived a block away from my house, but I had to also try and keep my distance at times too [run-on sentence]. I couldn’t even [slang. Write in essay form.] make a good friendship because of the circumstances. However, as much as the secret being kept hurt me, I don’t think I also would have had the heart to tell her the news. In a way [comma] that experience made me very “two-faced” for the months they went out even though I was trying to create a genuine friendship [run-on sentence]. [Relate the insights to the readings and lectures.]

[Conclusion not needed. Relate these points to the story.]Sometimes though we have to make some choices to protect some that possibly hurt others in the aftermath of your actions as well. This is only one instance of secrecy that I’ve had to keep. Along the years [comma] you gain experiences and learn things [redundant] that ultimately force you to make a decision of what to do with the information you are given and whether or not you choose to protect those involved [run-on sentence with multiple points, none of which are related to the story, the readings or the assignment].

I’ve got a secret

[Organize your ideas into paragraphs. No one wants to read a 500-word block of words.] [Introduction  not needed. Apply points made here to the events.] Everyone lives everyday [two words] as normal as they know. We can spend every minute with someone [comma] but that person will not know everything about that person. [How do these points relate to each other?] Secrets are information that one person may have and will not want any other person to know. There are times that the secret is just being help till the correct time [missing or wrong words]. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph.] The story takes place at work with a coworker that we became friends [ungrammatical] out side [one word] of work. My coworker and I created a bond out side of work and became really good friend [already stated in the previous sentence and repetitive within this sentence. Edit your work.] where we would tell each other a lot of things that would happen. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph.] There was a Monday that she came to me and said, “There is something that I have to tell you.” I thought to my self [one word] that it was something that happened over the weekend but I was wrong. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph.] My coworker and I walked into the lunchroom to talk but there were a couple of other coworkers in the lunchroom [comma] so we had to talk very low so no one can hear us. What my coworker was going to said [She was going to say it, but didn’t? Be clear.] to me was that she found out that she was pregnant. When she sold [SP] me [comma] I was so excited about the news, I did not contain my excitement. I had to quickly contain my excitement in the lunchroom so that know what else asked why I was so excited [missing words and ungrammatical]. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph.] The first thing she told me after I contained my excitement was that know [SP: no] one knew but her parents and sister. My coworker didn’t want any one [one word] to know at work to know she was pregnant till she was at least she reached to her second trimester. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph.] As the days went by [comma] we would talk about how to start decorating the nursery. For example, by this time my coworker already knew that she was having a little girl, so we started picking out colors to paint the walls of the nursery, what exactly she was going to use in the room. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph.] A couple of weeks went by and another coworker announced that she was pregnant and was expecting a little boy. Everyone was excited for her and stated congratulating her on becoming a mom. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph.] As we all talked about how exciting it is to be expecting a baby, someone said that there was another person that was also expecting. My friend turned, looked at me and whispered to me [comma] “I hope you didn’t say anything.” I had no [SP: not] said anything to any one [comma] so we just looked as confused as everyone else. Since people were trying to find out who the other person that was pregnant was, they were all asking everyone if they [agreement: “everyone” is a singular noun.] know who that other person was. I felt special knowing that I was the only one at work to know that my coworker was one of women [missing word] that were pregnant. Some weeks went by [comma] and when my coworker told everyone at work about her expecting a baby girl,we actually found out that there was three people that were expecting.

[Relate your feelings and insights to the readings. Did people make appeals based on ethos (your sense of honor, loyalty or justice) or pathos (feelings)? Did you carry a burden the way that Edward Snowden said he did?]

[Relate to class: You kept a confidentiality out of a prima facie duty and to show loyalty to a peer.]

[How did the experience empower you, the other person, or both of you?]


I used to have a best friend named Jeff, whose family is very conservative, is against drinking and secular activities, who liked to party and drink [run-on sentence make it seem that Jeff is against drinking but also likes to party.]. Anytime I would go over his family’s house to visit and hangout with [redundant and incorrect: hang out] Jeff, his mom would ask what we did on the weekend or where we went [Do you think the person trying to penetrate the secret had a desire to know, gain control, feel superior, or be intimate?] ; [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph.] Jeff would always reply with either “nothing mom, we went out to dance with our friends.” or “we just hung out.” When in reality, Jeff was out with our friends drinking his life away and getting wasted. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph.] One day after we left his house [comma] I looked at Jeff and asked why he’s lying to his parents. He never told me in the past that his parents do not condone this type of behavior nor do they believe he would ever do that, knowing his father used to struggle being an alcoholic needing rehab. His parents would punish him harshly if they ever found out that he was out drinking, they would take away his car, his freedom to leave the house and he would be completely isolated [run-on sentence]. [How did the experience empower you, the other person, or both of you?] 

Jeff asked me to keep this between him and I [case: me]. In the case that his parents would ever ask what he is doing, where he is or anything else concerning him, he said I should lie and say something to give him some cover so he is not exposed. This made me have a lot of power with the piece of information he provided me, in the case we are [tense: were] no longer friends and I wanted to ruin his life (not that I would) I could.

I remember one night I decided to stay in and finish a project that was due for a class I had on the following Monday after the weekend [redundant]. Jeff decided to go out with a few friends I’m not that close to, but he went out and enjoyed himself way too much to the point where he passed out and the friends he was with, just left him on the beach next to a stop sign on the floor [run-on sentence]. I got a call from his cell phone but it wasn’t Jeff on the other line. The person on the other line told me to come pick him up, at around 4 A.M. It wasn’t easy because I know his parents give him a curfew of 2 A.M. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph.] I hopped into my car, drove all the way to the beach to pick him up and take him back to my house and help him sober up before the next morning and get him home safely. His parents called me at 8 A.M. asking me where Jeff was, and I had to lie and tell them that he ended up just coming back to my house and he helped me with some homework and played Xbox. His parents were suspicious as to why Jeff never told them that he was coming to my house. I kept digging myself into deeper and deeper lies to protect Jeff. [Relate your feelings and insights to the readings. Did people make appeals based on ethos (your sense of honor, loyalty or justice) or pathos (feelings)? Did you carry a burden the way that Edward Snowden said he did?]

I may have built a stronger bond and trust with Jeff, but in the situation that his parents find out I lied to protect him, it will hurt my reputation with them, the rest of his family and my family for lying. [Relate to class: Keeping a confidentiality puts tremendous burden on the agent.] But I did what I had to, to protect my best friend Jeff. [Relate to class: You kept a confidentiality out of a prima facie duty and to show loyalty to a peer.] 

Assignment 5: 48-hour news blackout

After experiencing two days of news blackout, it was very surprising to realize the influence of news in my life. Even though we hear everywhere about importance of being informed, it is not until I experienced myself the absence of it that I realized no [SP: not] only the importance of the news on basic actions and decisions that I take every day, but I realized about the time I spend in getting informed while missing some events that occur around me and I do not pay attention just because I was reading a news that got my attention or maybe communicating with others using social media [Keep sentences short.].

Prior to start the 48 hours count, I checked my e-mail, because I thought it was my main source of news and thinking that it will not be a big effect by not having news during this period of time. But, as time went, the experience of the absence of news turned a little weird. I started realizing that when I do read the news, I kind of read to myself and hear my own voice, and I started to miss that kind of talking to myself. It was a kind of anxiety to read something and hear my own voice [Keep sentences short.]. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph] Since I am taking a class that has all assignments set for the entire semester and has a book that I love because is written in such a way that make you feel someone is talking straight to you, I went ahead and read the entire next chapter for following week assignment. It was weird because in a regular week, I struggle to have the reading completed, and so I realized that if we add up all the little times that we even just go check our social media and read a couple of news feed, it is a good portion of our time and so, we spend so much time on it [Keep sentences short.].

Now I understand more the people from the reformation time because maybe they felt the same kind of anxiety to hear their internal voice while reading, as Deresiewicz refers “The soul encountered itself in response to a text”.

Another aspect that I did not take in consideration until it happened on Tuesday was about the weather, and then I remember Dr. Pearson said in class we should take the umbrella everywhere, and I did not. After it stop raining, and seeing there were still some clouds in the sky and so it was a high probability of rain at later time; I started wondering why I just did not realize that earlier in the morning and I would go prepared for the rain. I realize that it is because I am used to rely in even simple comments in social media about the weather for example, to take decisions like whether to use a jacket, or take the umbrella, etc. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph] After that happened, I started to look around, not only the sky but all the green areas, the nature, the people, and I started wandering when was the last time I really stop for a little time and just contemplate and see what was going on. Maybe because this is my last semester at FIU, and it seem that everything is in a rush, and so many assignments and presentations are coming up soon, and on the other site [SP: side], is this “what is going to be next” feeling and pressure.

News Blackout

What Deresiewicz writes in “The End of Solitude” is very relatable to what most of us feel, especially when interacting through social media. Because of how easy it is to connect through social media, we can say that we are all globally connected. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph] The truth is, this technology also isolates us to only existing on the Internet. Being online makes us want to be more likeable and popular by posting pictures with friends on Instagram, sharing videos of our fun lives on SnapChat, and being humorous on Twitter. [good insights]

A few years back, we used to be okay with being alone for hours, our families and friends were only a phone call away. Now, we can be in contact with anyone from any part of the world in any time of the day. When we wake up, we check our phones. When we’re in class, we’re on our phones. Even when we’re driving, people can’t seem to disconnect for a few minutes. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph] I am displeased to admit it, but I see myself in Deresiewicz’s argument. The minute I’m not messaging my friends or going through my Twitter timeline, I feel slightly alone. However, unlike some people that are always surrounded by others, I’m not afraid of being alone. In fact, I enjoy it.

With the news blackout, I experienced I liked being physically alone, not necessarily kept out of the Internet. In the mornings during the blackout, I avoided using my phone at all costs, but I didn’t find it difficult to stay away. As the day continued, I found it hard to ignore some of my messages and go on Twitter. Thankfully, we didn’t discuss any news related topics during classes. I kept busy by working on photography projects and doing some writing, something that I always put off until I have to do it. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph] At first, I did feel in the dark; I barely talked to my friends and kept all communications on social media to a minimum. However, by the end of the afternoon, I didn’t feel anxious about what was going on the Internet. In fact, I felt calm and concentrated, like a naïve child. By the time the 48 hours ran up, I was glad to be back to a “normal” life.

After going through the news blackout, I can analyze that we do take news outlets for granted. It felt strange not knowing what was happening, whether it be knowing what’s trending on Twitter or what Trump’s administration was going to do next. I was anxious at first because I had to change my daily routine just a little, but after a few hours it felt good to disconnect from the world. The solitude that I experienced has helped me realize that it is good to isolate yourself from news outlets and social media platforms because it recalibrates us. We shouldn’t be afraid of feeling alone, we should embrace it. [good insights]

48 Hour News Blackout

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Information of any category is delivered in many ways. Newspapers, radios, television are all methods that information has been used to deliver to society. Now a day [Nowadays], the technology that is used for information delivered has changed. Facebook, Instagram, Twitter and even the news channels website are the way that most information is relayed to society. Technology is a tool that is used to connect people in so many ways but at the same time the space between people is getting feather and feather apart. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph] In “The End of Solitude,” talks about how boredom pushes people to stay connected with society by seeking connection though technology. For example, in essence the act of keeping the mind occupied with technology can take place of being bored. At this point a person can be alone in solitude and there are not board [SP: bored] by occupying the mind with any kind of technology use. The connection between loneliness and the use of technology just became a simple line. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph] One thing that society is teaching us with all the technology influence is that someone should never feel alone even in solitude because technology is a hands grasp away. For anyone to always need to be with company, when there is a moment of solitude that person can get lost very easy [run-on sentence]. Being alone and not having any kind of influence of the outside world affect the mind that may help a person in many ways [How might it help?].

One thing that has been noticed with the people growing up in the era of technology, anything that is wanted has to be put in effect within seconds of the thought being created. Everything can be easy when many things are only a couple of clicks away. Things like, [no comma] dating and meeting new people was [were] hard, especially for people that are shy. Technology has allowed people to create and be involved with a society that they would like to be apart [SP: a part]  of.

Being disconnected from technology, any information of the world, and any kind of information of person’s whereabouts is an interesting experience. Solitude allows the natural thoughts that occur in ones [one’s] mind to happen and there is a lot to learn from that. By not allowing technology to interrupt those thoughts [comma] a person is able to analyze and learn many things about themselves. Reflecting on such thoughts of events that have occurred, people can ask themselves questions like why did I act like that, I really don’t like when people treat me in those kinds of ways. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph] In solitude [comma] people can also look within themselves and reflect on their own spiritualty [SP: spirituality]. Religion and spiritualty are things that help guide a person but if that person looks what they are being thought they can see how that fits in their life and how that maybe applied. Being alone and disconnected from technology is something that should be applied to everyone’s life; it can help someone actually live his or her own life. [How might you act on these insights? How might your media consumption change?]

48 Hour Blackout

This 48-hour News Blackout was very interesting. When it comes to social media or anything pertaining to news, depending where I am, my phone is go to. Whether it’s local news, world news or celebrity news, my phone and Channel 7 or 10 News is where I run to. We are in a technological revolution so I can view the news anywhere and everywhere I go. [Good insights. How do they relate to the points that Deresiewicz raises in his essay?]

This has not been the first time that I have gone an extended period of time without my phone. Every summer I go on vacation to Jamaica for several weeks where I don’t use my phone or watch much tv. However, there is a huge difference between being in Jamaica and being at home with no media. When I am in Jamaica [comma] it is much easier to go without it because I have all kinds of stuff to do like swimming in the river or minding the chicken coop. Going 48 hours without media at home is way harder than I thought. [How do these experiences relate to the points that Deresiewicz raises in his essay?] 

I started the 48-hour news blackout on Saturday at 9 am. I logged out of all my social medias and disabled my notifications. At first it didn’t seem like it would be much of a big deal because I was busy at home helping my grandma with her fish sale. Later that night I went to L.A Fitness with my cousin and there were TVs all around. Around 9pm most of the screens were tuned into CNN. I usually use the elliptical machines but I decided to skip cardio because it would be impossible not to look up at the screen. I used other workout equipment that were far from the TVs and listened to some music so I wouldn’t be distracted by anyone. [How do these experiences relate to the points that Deresiewicz raises in his essay?] 

The following day, the hardest thing to do was avoid the TV. There is a TV in every room in my house but everyone gravitates towards the living room during the day to watch. I did my best to avoid watching it by listening to music to block out the sound. This assignment prevented me from being able to stay connected to what was going on in the world. Twitter, Instagram and Facebook are my main social media platforms. 48-hours without Twitter was one of the biggest challenges. [How do these experiences relate to the points that Deresiewicz raises in his essay?] 

From this experience, I Learned that news and media is important and without it I feel clueless to what is taking place in the world. It also helped me realize how much I rely on technology and that I should want to go outside and explore more.