Draft Thesis Quincy Hicks Team 4

During the France Protest starting in November 2018, the protesters did the right thing by going against Macron and his government.

not approved: you are analyzing an event and presenting the way in which you plan to analyze that event. you’re not stating your opinion on an event and then presenting evidence in support of your opinion.


Quincy Hicks Team 4 The 48 Hour Blackout

I started my assignment on Friday night/ Saturday morning with the realization that I would have to stay away from news for 48 hours. I don’t watch television news, but I am usually active on Twitter so I deleted it for the weekend. Twitter is my main news source so I was complely cut off from news. I am a huge sports fan so I usually watch ESPN the whole day, but I found myself watching other channels for a change such as MTV and VH1 which don’t show news.

After analyzing the article, The End of Solitude, I quickly realized how deep into this generation I really am. Deresiewicz made it seem as I would be isolated from everything and he was right. The first hours were the hardest. I was so anxious to re-download Twitter to see what’s going on in the world. A couple before this assignment was assigned, I tried to isolate myself and I actually went a whole day focusing on myself with no news. It was peaceful after a couple hours and same for this assignment once I got settled into it. But it felt like I was missing out on something every time I thought about Twitter. During this assignment, I found myself going to the gym and playing basketball with a couple of friends for multiple hours. Also reading a couple of books I got a few weeks ago and mixing that with TV watching and homework. I felt more focused than I have in along time.

I see myself in Deresiewicz argument when he talks about it being it being very visible to see how people can imitate the idea of the celebrity in their use of social media. We care about the followers, likes and tags to give us a “sense of closeness.” In my house, when somebody messes with the router for the Wi-Fi and we lose connection to internet everybody panics it is like we lose touch with the outside world when it happens. We don’t know life without the internet and it’s sad.  When we wake up the first thing we look at is our phones and the last thing we look at before we go to sleep.

In my opinion, news is definitely a necessary an intrusion of our solitude. Knowing what’s going on in the world around you is important, but the way we take news can change. Most people including me, find articles/stories on social media and take them as fact. News is taking away the feeling of thinking for ourselves. The media has interfered with our solitude in the sense that we have intertwined ourselves through devices while being disconnected through real life. We are afraid to be alone because society fiends for recognition. The point is we need news and media, but we need to give some time to ourselves to think and focus in solitude.

I’m very glad that someone mentioned reading books and exercise for this assignment (two of my main hobbies). I was beginning to get worried about everyone. But seriously: nicely presented details of your experience. Some of your writing is still a bit informal (even for an assignment of this nature). You made a lot of great points and insights based on the reading and answered the questions stated in the guidelines (which somehow people miss). I liked that you wrapped it up with a conclusion.

Quincy Hicks: Assignment 2 McLuhan Team 4

Marshall McLuhan uses critical perspective to present that medium is the message. Medium is the message is a quote that McLuhan is known for and it means that the content of the media does not matter but the way that it is delivered (ie. media, post office, etc) is more important to the environment. To confirm that he did you (three questions need to be answered rather than using “you have to”) have to answer 3 critical questions: Does McLuhan question commonly held assumptions, did he expand the bounds of debate and did he aim for the betterment of society? you are restating the assignment guidelines in your thesis statement, which is unnecessary.

In the playboy interview, McLuhan states, “As an investigator, I have no fixed point of view, no commitment to any theory-my own or anyone else’s.” From the statement you can get the sense the he question commonly held assumptions even assumptions he has come to himself. McLuhan questions commonly held in the playboy interview, he questioned the idea of caring more about the message than the medium or how the message is delivered. McLuhan feels that “content plays a subordinate role to the message” which is opposite of the assumption especially in this day in age with a lot of social media where in which content gets the headlines. this is very well stated.

He expands bounds of debates. An example is when he says, “An environment becomes fully visible only when it has superseded by a new environment. We are always one step behind. We tend to make the old environment more visible.” Most don’t think like this because they feel like we as the United States are ahead in some ways when it comes to technology which would expand bounds of debate. Also, his beliefs in firearms that were highlighted in the lectures shows that the way they are used questions commonly held assumptions and expands areas of debate. In the interview from Playboy, he expands the bounds of debate by analyzing and comparing the phonetic alphabet of thousands of years ago to Africa in recent years; he explains that artists are better at understanding changes than scientists because they are more open to it.

Lastly, McLuhan somewhat aimed for the betterment of society. McLuhan’s didn’t simply want  to aim for a betterment for society but more at what he describes as needling the somnambulists making people aware of what is going on around them especially when it comes to the media. As he says the old education system is not good for the first TV generation which means that their needs to be a better educational system for the future generations changing from a broken system. Thats why he points out that we first have to recognize “we are doing the wrong way before we do the right way”. Also going back to the firearm debate, McLuhan doesn’t judge if the firearms are good or bad but the way in which it used determine its value.

great grasp of the material!

Quincy Hicks Team 4 Rhetorical Analysis

Thesis Statement: Analyze Simons and Chabis’ piece “Our Memory Fails Us” for logos, pathos and ethos. Also, use Virginia’s Heffernan article “Comment is King” to see if the New York Times’ top 3 reader picks are effective. this is the objective of the assignment rather than a thesis statement which summarizes the argument you will make.

“Our Memory Fails Us” is about our memory conflicting with our mind to revert our memory to be based on our own personal experiences in that moment of thought. Ethos was found in this article when Chabis and Simons referred to Hillary Clinton, President Bush and Neil Degrasse Tyson as “smart people” giving them credibility. But at times in their lives they have forgotten important moments while speaking.good mention of rhetoric, but keep in mind you want to analyze not summarize (as much as possible).

Logos in this article was shown when talking about confidence when it comes to memory if ones is confident about remembering an event that is a good thing. But if one becomes overconfident in that memory it could lead to memory loss or a changing of the memory. Overconfidence comes from recalling thins so easy as we do in our daily ives which could lead this emotion. Another form of logos is when Dr. Neil Tyson called out President Bush for something that he didn’t recall fully about a certain Islamic statement that was made by President Bush. He got two of Mr. Bush’s speeches mixed up, but as a “good scientist” stayed open to the fact that he was wrong about his statement. This led to an apology by Tyson which showed great technique in apologizing for his lapse in memory. how is this logos (logic)? seems that you may mean ethos or credibility here.

Pathos was shown by Dr. Tyson’s emotion overshadowing his memory to recall President Bush’s speech on Islam. This occurring led to miscommunication among other things that weren’t true. In the article Chabis and Simons’ question, “Are our heroes memory made out of clay?” People we look up to are forgetting details about that are important creating a relatable emotion that ties to regular people that forget stuff to do on a daily basis.

In Heffernan’s article “Comment is King” she speaks on some commenters not having sustained analysis in their comments while criticizing the writers. She states that, “The integrity for the newspaper is being tainted by comments” not only does she give examples she also gives the usernames of some commenters. She concludes her argument by saying that, “Most commenters just want to defy the writers point” no matter the topic. But in the top 3 reader’s picks from the “Our Memory Fails Us” article in NYT that is not found in the top 3 at least. It is highlighted by a comment from Neil Degrasse Tyson among two other commenters. Tyson used other articles to stay open to other people’s ideas and the articles are cohesive with the article.  These three comments are all specific and related to the article. The second comment questions Bush’s intelligence which was spoken on in the article. The comment is backed with an article and quotes in which he thought Bush sounded dumb in his opinion. While the third stated his opinion on how he thinks honest should be looked at as that and not with malicious intent. All relate and go well with the article which makes the ranking comments effective. good grasp of Heffernan and decent rhetorical analysis (paragraph on pathos being the best). please proofread and be sure you understand what a thesis statement is in the future.