Erin Keenan: Final Essay (Team 18)

Hi Erin,

Nice work on your essay!  Good images and writing style. Overall a solid job on this assignment. I would have liked to have seen a bit more specifics incorporating class concepts in the paper, but truly well-done. 

 

As immigration becomes an intense topic in our country, the crisis at the United States and Mexican Border is more concerning than ever before. The mental and physical conditions of the immigrants who do not make it pass border control and are put into detention centers that are horrific. Specifically, the El Paso, Texas detention center is overflowing with internal health issues, secrecy and obvious neglect to the immigrant of which is causing deaths to many of these migrants.

Related image

 

The Mexican border crisis has been an American global issues for some time now. The events that take place before and after immigrants reach our free country is nothing new to our understanding. Their intent to make the dangerous journey to America could be for freedom, to get by committing crimes, or reasons we can not relate to. However, the bias we have when they are captured is what is reflecting in a negative light all over the media. How do we know this? News stories, books, interviews, and scholarly articles are all written in order to inform people about the Mexican border crisis.

Image result for the devil's highway

However what most people do not talk about, until recently, is what happens to the immigrants who barely survive the miles and miles they travel, but then are caught by border control. The media and higher officials portray most of these refuges as criminals, yet most should not be categorized to that social group. Most of these individuals have gone through extremely tough times in their home countries and they still make the dangerous journey to America. As time progresses we hear more and more about the deprivation of some of these brave individuals, some even write about their experiences or tell the media.  For example, Luis Alberto Urrea, author of The Devil’s Highway, wrote a true story based off a man’s journey through the Arizona desert in search for freedom. Through this story one learns about the detailed struggles this man went through with border patrol and legal Americans who hunt to take the law into their own hands. He wrote, “If it was Border Patrol’s job to apprehend lawbreakers, it was equally their duty to save the lost and the dying” (Urrea, 2011).  The experiences they go through are hard enough, but in addition, stories have lately come to our attention about when one is captured and put into a detention center. Specifically, one of the nine detention centers in the United States, The El Paso Service Processing Center, is the facility that has been in the news recently.

Thanks to George M. Anderson in his article “At the Mexican Border”, he touches upon the matters of who is in the detention center, where the detainees are from, and what they experience while being held there (Anderson, 1997).  It is hard to discuss the detail on how we know about the issues that go on inside because there is so much secrecy held within and around the detention center. The facility has kept lies and held secrets about the health conditions of the traveled individuals who are usually suffering from and illness or are experiencing starvation after their journey that was cut short. Even though they are illegal, action should be taken on the matter and these certain actions are not being taken into account in these detention centers. The neglect of their hygiene, health, and hunger, all take an incredible toll on the immigrants. In class we spoke about secrecy and how it is the intentional concealment that overlaps with the term privacy. There has even been recent deaths lately in the detention center. Before The Washington Post reported on the matter this passed December we would not have known about this terrible issue. The protection of the institutes name, thoughts, and actions of the center have all been shielded by secrecy. Carlos Holguin, general counsel for the Center for Human Rights & Constitutional Law, mentions in The Washington Post article that the government has an obligation to care for the immigrants and not let them die in federal custody. He states, “The longer the custody extends, the greater the government’s responsibility” (Holguin, 2018). Health-care professionals were contacted and reported that the Border Patrol’s El Paso sector will now order immediate medical assessment on all 700 children that it is holding. The two deaths in the past three months have shaken Border Patrol agents in the detention center and have started to  re-evaluate their actions on the immigrants that come into the center.

In addition to the tragic deaths, The Denver Channel 7 News reported two of the detainees even went on a hunger strike. The news article included the experience of a Texas Democratic Representative, Veronica Escobar. She mentioned that she toured the El Paso Processing Center and met with the men who decided to go on a hunger strike.  The article quotes her saying that she found the hunger strikers “deeply traumatized and frail” (7NEWS, 2019). The ends for these individuals are usually to be held there or in jails for most of their lives. However, most of them would rather die in these facilities then go back to their treacherous home countries.

Looking at the border crisis from a real world perspective, there are many controversial aspects about the topic and the series of issues that come with it. The El Paso Processing Center has held secrecy and lies throughout the past few years. If it wasn’t for the media and individuals speaking up the public would have never have known about the neglect the immigrants experience on a daily basis. When the media speaks or publishes about this issue, there are a few rhetorical appeals that come to mind. Viewers and readers have expressed their opinions on how they feel about the level morality the processing center and the laws of the country obtain. When people are thrown into the detention centers, most of the time families are split apart. In the past year, there have been activist who have protested on the grounds of the El Paso Processing Center. In an online article by Lauren Caruba, a former immigration paralegal spoke about why she was there to protest. Amber Ramirez stated that “she wanted to help the families be reunited and influence change to the country’s immigration policies (mySA, 2018). When one sees the photos and protest signs of the people affected in the El Paso center, there is an emotional appeal to the viewers. Immigration is a sensitive topic, however, when it comes to lies, secrecy, and essentially torture, one cannot help but feel saddened for these people. Fortunately, individuals who have been trying to have their voices be heard have additional protests of federal immigration policies currently being planned until they see a change.

<img src=”https://lh3.googleusercontent.com/HoeiXrBl2fBcGXq3JH-1GzxbTMCznfsKgnvRyhCEIXwwdgJp2PM-RfiDkZnvjg43Gs01xofVnvAMuJIMePX7dsfUERXsE9nq0TQcCAulAjpKVJ0kwSupnXFX9d_nmsCfcx4a1Psf&#8221; alt=”

More than 1,000 people march on an immigration center in El Paso. 

“/>

As a result of the media and people speaking up about the Mexican border and El Paso processing center, the citizens of the U.S. and beyond are now aware of the matter and now know about the secrecy behind closed doors. In recent years, the media has had received backlash on how they present and what information they present to the public. However, in this case, the event needed to be announced for the country to hear. With activist and modifications to the protocol in the center, hopefully there will be evident change and more liability given to the center’s leaders.

 

Bibliography

Anderson, George M. “At the Mexican Border.” America, vol. 176, no. 15, May 1997, pp. 3–4. EBSCOhost, ezproxy.fiu.edu/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=9705305892&site=ehost-live&scope=site.

Borunda, Daniel. “U.S. Immigration Policy That Separates Immigrant Children Angers Border, El Paso.” El Paso Times, El Paso Times, 6 June 2018, www.elpasotimes.com/story/news/immigration/2018/06/06/trump-immigration-policy-separating-immigrant-children-outrage-border-el-paso/662154002/.

By: The Associated Press. “ICE Halts Force-Feeding of Immigrant Detainees in Texas.” 7NEWS, 16 Feb. 2019, www.thedenverchannel.com/news/u-s-world/ice-halts-force-feeding-of-immigrant-detainees-in-texas.

“El Paso Pediatrician Discusses Medical Needs Of Migrant Children In Detention Centers.” NPR, NPR, 11 Jan. 2019, www.npr.org/2019/01/11/684610264/el-paso-pediatrician-discusses-medical-needs-of-migrant-children-in-detention-ce.

Infante, César, et al. “Violence Committed Against Migrants in Transit: Experiences on the Northern Mexican Border.” Journal of Immigrant & Minority Health, vol. 14, no. 3, June 2012, pp. 449–459. EBSCOhost, doi:10.1007/s10903-011-9489-y.

Sacchetti, M., & Moore, R. (2018, December 26). After 2nd child dies in U.S. custody, Nielsen expands medical screenings, will head to border. Retrieved from https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/immigration/2018/12/26/e7b262d4-0926-11e9-85b6-41c0fe0c5b8f_story.html?utm_term=.6d85b7b47ffa

Urrea, Luis Alberto. Adult Book Club Kit for Luis Alberto Urrea’s The Devil’s Highway. Fayetteville Public Library, 2011.

 

Advertisements

Erin Keenan: Final Essay Draft (Team 18)

Good job Erin, good details and images.  I ‘d like to see you integrate one or more of the class concepts into your essay. You mention the word ‘secrecy’ but then there is no follow-up with that.  See if you could look at the rhetorical triangle as well and utilize that too. All in all, fine work!

 

As immigration becomes an intense topic in our country, the crisis at the United States and Mexican Border is more concerning than ever before. The mental and physical conditions of the immigrants who do not make it pass border control and are put into detention centers that are horrific. Specifically, the El Paso, Texas detention center is overflowing with internal health issues, secrecy and obvious neglect to the immigrant of which is causing deaths to many of these migrants.

Related image

 

The Mexican border crisis has been an American global issues for some time now. The events that take place before and after immigrants reach our free country is nothing new to our understanding. Their intent to make the dangerous journey to America could be for freedom, to get by committing crimes, or reasons we can not relate to. However, the bias we have when they are captured is what is reflecting in a negative light all over the media. How do we know this? News stories, books, interviews, and scholarly articles are all written in order to inform people about the Mexican border crisis.

Image result for the devil's highway

However what most people do not talk about, until recently, is what happens to the immigrants who barely survive the miles and miles they travel, but then are caught by border control. The media and higher officials portray most of these refuges as criminals, yet most should not be categorized to that social group. Most of these individuals have gone through extremely tough times in their home countries and they still make the dangerous journey to America. As time progresses we hear more and more about the deprivation of some of these brave individuals, some even write about their experiences or tell the media.  For example, Luis Alberto Urrea, author of The Devil’s Highway, wrote a true story based off a man’s journey through the Arizona desert in search for freedom. Through this story one learns about the detailed struggles this man went through with border patrol and legal Americans who hunt to take the law into their own hands. He wrote, “If it was Border Patrol’s job to apprehend lawbreakers, it was equally their duty to save the lost and the dying” (Urrea, 2011).  The experiences they go through are hard enough, but in addition, stories have lately come to our attention about when one is captured and put into a detention center. Specifically, one of the nine detention centers in the United States, The El Paso Service Processing Center, is the facility that has been in the news recently.

Thanks to George M. Anderson in his article “At the Mexican Border”, he touches upon the matters of who is in the detention center, where the detainees are from, and what they experience while being held there (Anderson, 1997).  It is hard to discuss the detail on how we know about the issues that go on inside because there is so much secrecy held within and around the detention center, The facility has kept lies about the health conditions of the traveled individuals who are usually suffering from and illness or are experiencing starvation after their journey that was cut short. Even though they are illegal, action should be taken on the matter and these certain actions are not being taken into account in these detention centers. The neglect of their hygiene, health, and hunger, all take an incredible toll on the immigrants. There has even been recent deaths lately. The Washington Post reported on the matter this passed December. Carlos Holguin, general counsel for the Center for Human Rights & Constitutional Law, mentions in the article that the government has an obligation to care for the immigrants and not let them die in federal custody. He states, “The longer the custody extends, the greater the government’s responsibility” (Holguin, 2018). Health-care professionals were contacted and reported that the Border Patrol’s El Paso sector will now order immediate medical assessment on all 700 children that it is holding. The two deaths in the past three months have shaken Border Patrol agents in the detention center and have started to  re-evaluate their actions on the immigrants that come into the center.

In addition to the tragic deaths, The Denver Channel 7 News reported two of the detainees even went on a hunger strike. The news article included the experience of a Texas Democratic Representative, Veronica Escobar. She mentioned that she toured the El Paso Processing Center and met with the men who decided to go on a hunger strike.  The article quotes her saying that she found the hunger strikers “deeply traumatized and frail” (7NEWS, 2019). The ends for these individuals are usually to be held there or in jails for most of their lives. However, most of them would rather die in these facilities then go back to their treacherous home countries.

Looking at the border crisis from a real world perspective, there are many controversial aspects about the topic and the series of issues that come with it. The El Paso Processing Center has held secrecy and lies throughout the past few years. If it wasn’t for the media and individuals speaking up the public would have never have known about the neglect the immigrants experience on a daily basis. When the media speaks or publishes about this issue, there are a few rhetorical appeals that come to mind. Viewers and readers have expressed their opinions on how they feel about the level morality the processing center and the laws of the country obtain. When people are thrown into the detention centers, most of the time families are split apart. In the past year, there have been activist who have protested on the grounds of the El Paso Processing Center. In an online article by Lauren Caruba, a former immigration paralegal spoke about why she was there to protest. Amber Ramirez stated that “she wanted to help the families be reunited and influence change to the country’s immigration policies (mySA, 2018). Individuals who have been trying to have their voices be heard have additional protests of federal immigration policies currently being planned until they see a change.

<img src=”https://lh3.googleusercontent.com/HoeiXrBl2fBcGXq3JH-1GzxbTMCznfsKgnvRyhCEIXwwdgJp2PM-RfiDkZnvjg43Gs01xofVnvAMuJIMePX7dsfUERXsE9nq0TQcCAulAjpKVJ0kwSupnXFX9d_nmsCfcx4a1Psf&#8221; alt=”

More than 1,000 people march on an immigration center in El Paso. 

“/>

As a result of the media and people speaking up about the Mexican border and El Paso processing center, the citizens of the U.S. and beyond are now aware of the matter and now know about the secrecy behind closed doors. In recent years, the media has had received backlash on how they present and what information they present to the public. However, in this case, the event needed to be announced for the country to hear. With activist and modifications to the protocol in the center, hopefully there will be evident change and more liability given to the center’s leaders.

 

 

Bibliography:

Anderson, George M. “At the Mexican Border.” America, vol. 176, no. 15, May 1997, pp. 3–4. EBSCOhost, ezproxy.fiu.edu/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=9705305892&site=ehost-live&scope=site.

Borunda, Daniel. “U.S. Immigration Policy That Separates Immigrant Children Angers Border, El Paso.” El Paso Times, El Paso Times, 6 June 2018, www.elpasotimes.com/story/news/immigration/2018/06/06/trump-immigration-policy-separating-immigrant-children-outrage-border-el-paso/662154002/.

By: The Associated Press. “ICE Halts Force-Feeding of Immigrant Detainees in Texas.” 7NEWS, 16 Feb. 2019, www.thedenverchannel.com/news/u-s-world/ice-halts-force-feeding-of-immigrant-detainees-in-texas.

“El Paso Pediatrician Discusses Medical Needs Of Migrant Children In Detention Centers.” NPR, NPR, 11 Jan. 2019, www.npr.org/2019/01/11/684610264/el-paso-pediatrician-discusses-medical-needs-of-migrant-children-in-detention-ce.

Infante, César, et al. “Violence Committed Against Migrants in Transit: Experiences on the Northern Mexican Border.” Journal of Immigrant & Minority Health, vol. 14, no. 3, June 2012, pp. 449–459. EBSCOhost, doi:10.1007/s10903-011-9489-y.

Sacchetti, M., & Moore, R. (2018, December 26). After 2nd child dies in U.S. custody, Nielsen expands medical screenings, will head to border. Retrieved from https://www.washingtonpost.com/local/immigration/2018/12/26/e7b262d4-0926-11e9-85b6-41c0fe0c5b8f_story.html?utm_term=.6d85b7b47ffa

Urrea, Luis Alberto. Adult Book Club Kit for Luis Alberto Urrea’s The Devil’s Highway. Fayetteville Public Library, 2011.

Erin Keenan: Annotated Bibliography (Team #18)

Hi Erin,

Excellent!  Good sources, and good annotations, well-done!

Erin Keenan

HWKWWK: Thesis and Annotated Bibliography

IDS 3309

 

Thesis:

As immigration becomes an intense topic in our country, the crisis of the Mexican Border is more concerning than ever before. The mental and physical conditions of the immigrants who do not make it passed border control and are put into detention centers are horrific. Specifically, the El Paso, Texas detention center is overflowing with internal health issues, secrecy, and obvious neglection which is causing deaths to many of these migrant travelers.

 

Annotated Bibliography:

1.Book

Urrea, Luis Alberto. Adult Book Club Kit for Luis Alberto Urrea’s The Devil’s Highway. Fayetteville Public Library, 2011.

  • This book is a true story based off a 26 year old man’s journey across the Mexican Border through the Arizona desert known to migrant travelers as The Devil’s HIghway. He travels with a group of people. Twelve succeed reaching the other side and the other fourteen become victims to the U.S. Border Patrol, Mexican Federales, and American Citizens who take the law of immigration into their own hands. The book sets the scene of what it is like to be a migrant traveler and the extreme hardships they take on to reach freedom.

2. Journal Article in a Scholarly Journal

Infante, César, et al. “Violence Committed Against Migrants in Transit: Experiences on the Northern Mexican Border.” Journal of Immigrant & Minority Health, vol. 14, no. 3, June 2012, pp. 449–459. EBSCOhost, doi:10.1007/s10903-011-9489-y.

  • Migrants who are in transit to the United States are known to be vulnerable due to their lack of access to health care and legal assistance. In this scholarly article, a study backed up by charts, shows evidence on the violent related consequences that migrants experience during their journey. It talks about arbitrary detention centers, verbal abuse, death threats, and other types of violent experiences.

3. Article In A Popular Or Trade Magazine

Anderson, George M. “At the Mexican Border.” America, vol. 176, no. 15, May 1997, pp. 3–4. EBSCOhost, ezproxy.fiu.edu/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=9705305892&site=ehost-live&scope=site.

  • This article specifically talks about the El Paso Service Processing Center. This is one of the nine detention centers that are in the United States. Touches upon the matters of who is in the detention center, where the detainees are from, and what they do while there.

 

4.  Newspaper Article Published In The Country Of The Topic (Online Newspaper)

Borunda, Daniel. “U.S. Immigration Policy That Separates Immigrant Children Angers Border, El Paso.” El Paso Times, El Paso Times, 6 June 2018, www.elpasotimes.com/story/news/immigration/2018/06/06/trump-immigration-policy-separating-immigrant-children-outrage-border-el-paso/662154002/.

  • Currently, immigration laws are under the global microscope. President Donald Trump hard stance on immigration is a difficult escalation that is affecting many people. Therefore, immigrants are advocating due to the separation of children and families.

5. A Good Website

By: The Associated Press. “ICE Halts Force-Feeding of Immigrant Detainees in Texas.” 7NEWS, 16 Feb. 2019, www.thedenverchannel.com/news/u-s-world/ice-halts-force-feeding-of-immigrant-detainees-in-texas.

  • I chose this website and article to touch upon the secrecy that surround the immigration detention center. In this article, it states the matter of the center stopping to force feed detainees that went on a hunger strike. Statements are made by the ICE and the detainees themselves.

 

6. One Good Source Of My Choice

“El Paso Pediatrician Discusses Medical Needs Of Migrant Children In Detention Centers.” NPR, NPR, 11 Jan. 2019, www.npr.org/2019/01/11/684610264/el-paso-pediatrician-discusses-medical-needs-of-migrant-children-in-detention-ce.

  • Interview with an El Paso pediatrician discussing the medical needs of migrant children in detention centers. Concerns remain that migrants, especially children remain at risk in this U.S. detention center based off of obvious health related red flags.

Erin Keenan: Annotated Bibliography (Team #18)

Hi Erin,

Excellent! Good sources and good annotations!

 

Erin Keenan

HWKWWK: Thesis and Annotated Bibliography

IDS 3309

 

Thesis:

As immigration becomes an intense topic in our country, the crisis of the Mexican Border is more concerning than ever before. The mental and physical conditions of the immigrants who do not make it passed border control and are put into detention centers are horrific. Specifically, the El Paso, Texas detention center is overflowing with internal health issues, secrecy, and obvious neglection which is causing deaths to many of these migrant travelers.

 

Annotated Bibliography:

1.Book

Urrea, Luis Alberto. Adult Book Club Kit for Luis Alberto Urrea’s The Devil’s Highway. Fayetteville Public Library, 2011.

  • This book is a true story based off a 26 year old man’s journey across the Mexican Border through the Arizona desert known to migrant travelers as The Devil’s HIghway. He travels with a group of people. Twelve succeed reaching the other side and the other fourteen become victims to the U.S. Border Patrol, Mexican Federales, and American Citizens who take the law of immigration into their own hands. The book sets the scene of what it is like to be a migrant traveler and the extreme hardships they take on to reach freedom.

2. Journal Article in a Scholarly Journal

Infante, César, et al. “Violence Committed Against Migrants in Transit: Experiences on the Northern Mexican Border.” Journal of Immigrant & Minority Health, vol. 14, no. 3, June 2012, pp. 449–459. EBSCOhost, doi:10.1007/s10903-011-9489-y.

  • Migrants who are in transit to the United States are known to be vulnerable due to their lack of access to health care and legal assistance. In this scholarly article, a study backed up by charts, shows evidence on the violent related consequences that migrants experience during their journey. It talks about arbitrary detention centers, verbal abuse, death threats, and other types of violent experiences.

3. Article In A Popular Or Trade Magazine

Anderson, George M. “At the Mexican Border.” America, vol. 176, no. 15, May 1997, pp. 3–4. EBSCOhost, ezproxy.fiu.edu/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=9705305892&site=ehost-live&scope=site.

  • This article specifically talks about the El Paso Service Processing Center. This is one of the nine detention centers that are in the United States. Touches upon the matters of who is in the detention center, where the detainees are from, and what they do while there.

 

4.  Newspaper Article Published In The Country Of The Topic (Online Newspaper)

Borunda, Daniel. “U.S. Immigration Policy That Separates Immigrant Children Angers Border, El Paso.” El Paso Times, El Paso Times, 6 June 2018, www.elpasotimes.com/story/news/immigration/2018/06/06/trump-immigration-policy-separating-immigrant-children-outrage-border-el-paso/662154002/.

  • Currently, immigration laws are under the global microscope. President Donald Trump hard stance on immigration is a difficult escalation that is affecting many people. Therefore, immigrants are advocating due to the separation of children and families.

5. A Good Website

By: The Associated Press. “ICE Halts Force-Feeding of Immigrant Detainees in Texas.” 7NEWS, 16 Feb. 2019, www.thedenverchannel.com/news/u-s-world/ice-halts-force-feeding-of-immigrant-detainees-in-texas.

  • I chose this website and article to touch upon the secrecy that surround the immigration detention center. In this article, it states the matter of the center stopping to force feed detainees that went on a hunger strike. Statements are made by the ICE and the detainees themselves.

 

6. One Good Source Of My Choice

“El Paso Pediatrician Discusses Medical Needs Of Migrant Children In Detention Centers.” NPR, NPR, 11 Jan. 2019, www.npr.org/2019/01/11/684610264/el-paso-pediatrician-discusses-medical-needs-of-migrant-children-in-detention-ce.

  • Interview with an El Paso pediatrician discussing the medical needs of migrant children in detention centers. Concerns remain that migrants, especially children remain at risk in this U.S. detention center based off of obvious health related red flags.

Erin Keenan: Thesis Draft Approval Team 18

I know my event is a little out of the time frame that is said in the instructions but I believe there was a lot of media coverage on the event and I could elaborate on how we knew the details about the event and the present relationship between the couple.

I can change my topic if it is not as controversial as the paper needs to be.

Thesis:

The British Royal Wedding of Prince Harry and American actress, Meghan Markle brought a lot of media attention and controversy since the day the couple got married. News broadcasting stations and other media outlets sensationalized the day of the event and continue to relentlessly report specific detail on Markle’s past and present life. There has been negative and positive messages publicized by the media about the new Royal Highness, The Duchess of Sussex, which later effects Britain’s royal traditions.

Hi Erin,

Well, I’d like to see you find something controversial and also something that you can use the concepts and ideas discussed in the class readings. I can help you if you like. I’ll be there this evening or we can discuss by phone or email.

Erin Keenan: “The End of Solitude” Assignment 3: Team 18

Hi Erin,

Overall a very good post. I liked how you brought the Rhetorical Triangle into the readings. Good writing style, grammar, and sentence structure. You made some very good points but I think I would have liked to see you expound upon some of them. Good job!

I really enjoyed the essay, “The End of Solitude” by William Deresiewicz. His expression of solitude hits home to the modern day norm. Deresiewicz’s explanation of the self and what aspects are influencing the self is so interesting. In addition, I believe it all to be true. Everything the author talked about is accurate in this modern technological age.

Deresiewicz used different forms of rhetoric in order to get his message across to his readers. When he said, “I speak from experience”, is when he used ethos in order let his audience know that he has seen and experienced  this phenomenon for a long time. He then talks about his childhood and growing up and having times where he was constantly bored. Now a days, people associate boredom with being alone. Deresiewicz tries to explain that being bored does not have to be a bad thing. This then brings into account the idea of solitude. This recognition is the idea of solitude and people then believe in that moment, they are lonely. However, the author explains people are not lonely because there is an absence of company, it is the grief over that absence that takes over one’s emotions.

Another form of rhetoric that Deresiewicz uses to explain “The End of Solitude” is the use of logos through examples. This then creates a sense of feeling (pathos) to his readers. The author describes a teenager and the number of text messages she sent in a recent month. In the example, it was around 100 texts a day, or about one every 10 minutes. This one example is not to just show how connected she is, but to show how little amount of time she can go alone being by herself. The solitude rate this one teeanager is going is just an example. There are millions of people in our generation and the generation before us that are now adapted to this way of life. (I would like a bit more explanation about this thought?)

This weekend I took the 48 hours news blackout challenge. Starting on Friday morning and ending Sunday morning, I was not connected to social media or any news streaming devices. I will admit, the state of solitude is real. My generation and myself have become so adapted at having everything at our fingertips. Yes, it has benefited us in several ways. However, I do not think myself will ever be truly authentic again. Deresiewicz mentions the ways of “celebrity and connectivity”. I strongly believe and see this in my day to day life. On Saturday I went out on a friends boat. Throughout the day, I saw my friends taking pictures and posting them to their social media platforms. This is the culture of celebrity. I have heard the saying, “Pictures or it didn’t happen”, plenty of times. On Saturday, I saw it with my own two eyes. This then leads to the culture of connectivity. I did not have my phone so I was not connected in the same way they were. They were connecting through the internet with people that were not even present. I however, tried to ignore the feeling of solitude in that sense, but connected to the moment with the people that were present. (interesting!) 

“The End of Solitude” is just the start of research on this phenomenon. With the rate our world is going, technology will keep advancing, therefore so will people’s levels of solitude. (do you mean their level for the need for solitude will increase?) 

Erin Keenan: Team 18

Hi Erin,

Please do not use 1st person in posts. The second two paragraphs are fine.  You make some good points and your writing style, word choices, and sentence structure are rather good. Overall, you are just slightly shy of the 500 word count but did raise some interesting points.

Marshall McLuhan’s interesting view on society and its counterparts was difficult to understand when read the first time. I had always thought when I saw messages on the internet or heard professionals speak about their arguments, I focused on what what being said. Nowadays I have realized there is much more that goes into sharing a message. I even take part in performing the strategic ways myself.  As I was learning and analyzing McLuhan’s thought process, it allowed my mind to grasp what he was trying to tell people. McLuhan was an icon who essentially revolutionized the way we look at media. In the past, when someone wrote or said something persuasive, their content is what people listened and reacted to. However, for McLuhan, it was how the media the shared a message, how the envelope got to someone, and the overall process of how the messaging was delivered. The packaging or the way the message got to the audience is what became important.

Throughout history, McLuhan cited several changes caused by the media. One of these changes was seeing the world as linear, structured, and uniform. Before McLuhan’s media findings people had a strict way of thinking about the media and never accepted radical opinions. However, when he started his research he made people step back and think. Along with the changes in media their were alterations in authorship, public education, and overall nationalism. McLuhan was an original believer of electronic media and all of its components. For him electronic media was everything from the lightbulb to the computer. He was always pushing the knowledge of media to different limits. With societal factors changing, as mentioned, he was still able to persuade and influence people with his idea about the medium of the message.

That being said, when McLuhan started his research and shared his findings, he came up with the popular phrase, “the medium is the message”. His idea depicts critical thinking because he disregards the norm of what people believed. McLuhan challenges people’s arguments and pushed boundaries throughout society. This creates a chance for a debate to occur because not everyone will agree with his ideas and arguments. People who do follow his understandings and ideas, will create a larger critical perspective because their will be a growing public opinion. As McLuhan created this incredible way of thinking he was consistently improving society. His ideas were a clear demonstration of the foundation of critical thinking and the critical perspective.