Thesis Statement – Nathaniel Cuevas

Thesis Statement: On a beautiful Monday, during the beginning of a new week, President Trump visited FIU to discuss and address the ongoing crisis in Venezuela. The country that was once South America’s richest country is currently in turmoil due to boycotts, voting fraud, and many other factors that have left more than half of the countries people in poverty. Venezuela has impacted the world by communicating, sharing, and influencing different countries, who side with the “acting president” or the current president. This great impact even has the United States involved, which a reason why President Trump visited South Florida to address the crisis.

Not approved: Are you analyzing the impact Venezuela has on the world through media? You should make that clear. You can eliminate the beautiful monday beginning of a new week…while poetic, it’s not necessary here. Good topic and idea though! just a bit a reworking

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Nathaniel Cuevas Team 5 – 48 Hour News Blackout

Within the world and society, we live in today comma should be here technology has expanded so much. Creating this social world for us where we are able to stay connected, laugh, and share our lives with others. From the article titled “The End of Solitude” written by William Deresiewicz, to giving up my phone and social life 48 hours, subject needed here for sentence to work all ties into the lesson of how we try to stay connected with everyone and how we need to disconnect. Williams article pointed out very great points about our fear of living alone end sentence and start new one here and pushing myself to stay away from the social world for 48 hours was quiet challenging.

            William Deresiewicz article titled “The End of Solitude” was very intriguing and brought up a few points I did not think about. you don’t need to state the author and title. it is assumed. did not think about when and in what context? William began his article by discussing the connection between the camera and celebrities. In todays world we all want to be scene just like celebrities do themselves. We post to share our lives and to be scene by others creating this sense of connection. This type of “terror” William calls is anonymity. To avoid anonymity or in other words “anonymous” we share out lives to everyone through a camera and the social world provided by technology. I see myself in Williams argument as he mentions how at a very young age we grow very dependent on social patterns. I remember for myself at a young age when social media, tv, and texting began to become more popular. Ever since then I continue to rely using my phone to communicate with others on a daily basis. there is too much summary in this paragraph.

            As of February 15th I began my 48 hour process of disconnecting from the world. Shutting my phone off, no news outlets, social media, and or TV. I knew before beginning the process, it was going to be difficult for me. My phone, which allows me to stay connected with others, is part of my life on the daily. William through his article mentioned feeling solitude and the point of disconnecting was to feel solitude for 48 hours. From the beginning of the process, I did not feel any solitude. I had moments where I did not want to feel alone. I wanted to stay connected through texting my friends and family. Not being able to roam through social media bothered me. Although there were a few moments I did feel solitude, such as taking a moment to go outside for a walk or at the gym. Things such as the weather or other new sources is stuff we take for granted. Many other countries sadly don’t have access to weather reports to the cant prepare for natural disasters, or the media and news sources are not being controlled. which countries are these? For our solitude it is necessary for news to intrude because even though, why is there a comma here? we are alone its still important to know what’s going on in the world to survive such as the weather. “to survive such as” does not make sense as a sentence. it is important to know what is going on in the world to survive. for instance, the weather forecast alerts us to impending catastrophic conditions, such as severe thunderstorms and hurricanes.

            The experience trying to survive with no form of communicating was the most challenging. I realize how I’m so dependent to feeling connected. Williams article brought up great points and we should take time to disconnect and feel solitude for once.

Hi Nathaniel, I hope you do not take my corrections personally. You need to make sure your sentences and grammar are correct. There was also a lot of summary and you used very informal tone. please see the writing center or make an effort to do the assignment ahead of time next time.

Nathaniel Cuevas Team 5- Assignment 2

Thesis Statement: Marshall McLuhan uses his critical perspective and utilizes it to present that the medium is the message.

McLuhan shares his theories about how the media impacts a man and society. Shared by McLuhan himself, from his playboy interview, has expressed how the medium itself that is the message, but not the content. In other words, the medium has a big influence on man and society due to the way we receive and perceive information. They way man receives the information is more important than the actual message itself.

Due to the media, from phonetic alphabet to the computer, the extensions of man causes lasting changes in him and his environment, stated by McLuhan. McLuhan shares that the form of self-hypnosis called, Narcissus narcosis, is where a man remains unaware of the psychic and social effects of his new technology. Due to a new media being induced an environment then becomes persuasive and our sensory balance becomes invisible. This lets people tend to get stuck with the current stage of technology.

The comfort and happiness for people as stated from the interview is understanding the nature of a new environment. McLuhan expands on this by expressing unlike previous environmental changes, the electric media constitute to to a transformation towards culture, values, and attitudes.

In a way questioning the betterment to society, McLuhan mentions the struggle to keeping up with current stage technology within the education system. Education should be helping the youth adapt to the constant change and revolutionary new environments. The education system shares the past values and past technologies till the old generation give up the power. There could be a creative blend between the new era and old era to help the adjustment to the educational environment.

In conclusion Marshall McLuhan used his critical perspective to showcase how the medium is the message. He shares how the media has impacted our society and how a man can get trapped in their current stage of technology. This then affects the kids and the education system and technology continues to grow, change, and expand.

Concise, well-organized and informative. I was looking for information on expanding the bounds of debate, as well. Be sure to proofread and make sure the grammar and flow of your writing works.

Nathaniel Cuevas Team 5- Assignment 1

Thesis Statement: After reviewing the article “Why Our Memory Fails Us” written by Christopher F. Chabris and Daniel J. Simons, it is clear the article uses all three rhetorical appeals ethos, logos, and pathos to help support their argument one way or another.

Throughout the passage titled “Why Our Memory Fails Us” by Christopher F. Chabris and Daniel J. Simon they used the rhetorical appeals which are ethos, logos, and pathos to help support and build their claim towards one’s memory. An example used throughout the passage is logos. They discussed when our memory is challenged that everyone remembers an event differently and our emotions can affect our memory. As quoted from the article “Overconfidence in memory could emerge from our daily experience: We recall events easily and often, at least if they are important to us, but only rarely do we find our memories contradicted by evidence”.  The perfect example used was Neil Degrasse Tyson where he then apologized after being exposed for his false memory.

A prime example of pathos that Chabris and Simon used to convince their audience were these various lines pulled from the article. “Overconfidence in memory could emerge from our daily experience. Memory failures that resemble Dr. Tyson’s mash-up of distinct experiences have led to false convictions, and even death sentences.” The author allowed the reader to self-reflect the times where their memory was false and how there can be great consequences when our memory fails us.

Daniel Simon one ,of the authors, served during the fall panel for the National Academy of Sciences. They released a report that quote “Recommended procedures to minimize the chances of false memory and mistaken identification, including videotaping police lineups and improving jury instructions.” This is a great use of ethos making the article seem more credible.

Simon and Chabris used all three of the rhetorical appeals within their article to help support their claim. Pathos was the main rhetorical appeal used within the article followed behind ethos. The authors mainly used emotion and creditable claims to help support their message.

The top three reader picks from the NYT were convincing to readers because of their original ideas based from the article “Comment is King” by Virginia Heffernan. Each of the top three comments used rhetorical appeals in a way. The second comment by Keith Dow used the form of logos pulling up quotes to help support his claim that he disagreed that president Bush was intelligent. The next comment written by Jacob Sommer used the form of pathos sharing how they’witness mistaken memories supporting his claim. The emotion thought behind his comment is helping him support his claim.  These top three comments allow other readers to connect and to expand the discussion/ point of the article.

NYT approach to ranking comments might not be the best approach due to the audience engaging more in the readers pick. The audience wants to engage and discuss on the topics sharing their opinions and responses. Neil DeGrasse Tyson was the first choice under the readers pick comment section with the most shared recommendation comments. This reveals what’ most popular under the comment section. As discussed from the article “Comment is King” Heffernan suggest that filtering the comments is the best way to allow the comments that challenges the article and sharing their input not drown in a sea of comments that are unpleasant.

very strong analysis and writing for your first assignment (a bit long though)