Secrecy and Lies

When I started FIU I came in with a tight nit [SP: knit] [tight-knit] friend support system that included my Boyfriend, my friends Sueann and Roshawn. These are people I’ve known practically my entire life all of whom I was very fond of and cared for a lot. [new action, new paragraph] Once I moved into my dorm and got settled in [comma] I didn’t see my friends as much and spoke to them a little less frequently. Being in a new environment and away from my friends forced me to meet new people. During a residential meeting, I had a chance to meet my neighbors Sabine and Shanett. We formed a bond gradually and from there seemly it was smooth sailing. [new time, new paragraph] When room selection rolled around for the following year [comma] we decided to make sure that we pulled one another in so that we could be roommates. When we moved in the following semester [comma] I roomed with Sabine and Shanett had a room to herself. At this point I’d introduced my old friends to my new friends in attempt to combine my college life with my home life. [new action, new paragraph] What seemed to be going great didn’t turn out quite the way I expected. I found myself stuck in the middle of a very sticky yet delicate situation. One of my college friends, who was also now my roommate, found herself catching feelings [slang] for my friend Roshawn who was at the time dating Sueann and had been for a few years. That was only the beginning of my worries. [new action, new paragraph] It began to escalate quickly from both parties. They became intimate and it persisted for a while before it was even brought to my attention. All of this was a shock to me, here were two friends I’d been knowing [I had known] nearly all my life who were dating and a new friend who I lived with, which put me in a even more awkward position. [new time, new paragraph] Over time [comma] questions began to arise about the nature of Sabine and Roshawn’s relationship from Sueann and that’s where the lies began to come in. Now I had to lie to keep a secret but it did not make me feel empowered but in fact the complete opposite. I felt enslaved, two people counting on me to keep their dirty secret [Were you keeping secrets to protect their reputations?] and then another person trusting my word, trusting me to be a true friend and tell her what was really going on behind doors. [new action, new paragraph] I told a friend about the situation only because she was around so much and began to question the relationship herself. This friend did try to penetrate the secret, not by going to them herself but by trying to explain to me why I should tell. She explained to me that a friend that I’d been knowing for years should come first but she failed to realize that I’d known Roshawn longer and that it was to [SP: too] big of a secret to tell and in the end I’d still be in the hot seat because I’d known about the situation and I didn’t say anything for so long and in addition to that, I’d be telling the secret I’d promise not to tell [run-on sentence of 77 words]. I understand how secrecy, lies and confidently go hand in hand. I told a lie to keep a secret and I wasn’t able to tell the secret not only because of confidentiality and because of the backlash and uproar it would cause.

Deresiewicz Solitary Assgn.

[Write short paragraphs. It’s difficult to read or understand one giant blob of text.]

Since, placing myself on this sort of solitary confinement, disconnecting myself from news, and social media essentially, I have found myself experiencing boredom, [period mark] In the text [comma] it is defined as an negative experience of a state. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph] I did however, spend a lot of time thinking and analyzing myself, the people I surround myself with, my behavior, I even began to measure my happiness. I found myself becoming very depressed, sad and crying. This is something I experience when I become stressed or feel alone, which is exactly how I felt during this time of solitude. I can say however, I do however from time to time go into a depressive state but never have I induced it. [How do these feelings relate to the points that Deresiewicz raises in his essay?] [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph] In order to fill the void, I tried to study, and a realized that focusing for longs periods of time did not work for me, maybe because I’m used to looking at Facebook, or Snapchat every ten minutes. Finding social events to attend wasn’t difficult, however mustering up the courage to attend these events was hard. In a social setting, I experience anxiety and I tend to separate myself from the crowd due to my lack of experience in socializing with people.  In the argument about this culture of celebrity, I picture myself and realize how much this truly applies to me. I measure the amount of followers I have on Instagram as we as the number of likes I get on a single picture. It is like having status and people do recognize you from your social media accounts. [good insight] I almost feed off of the amount of attention and love I get from social media and oddly enough it does validate a person to a certain extent, it allows me to feel on top of the world and I do feel as though from social media I sort of developed a small fan base [Keep sentences short.]. I don’t have information that I normally rely on like the weather to make decisions. I usually do not watch the news or weather reports to determine how I will go about my day. I’m pretty good at interpreting the weather on my own based off of how hot, cold or windy it is, along with this innate ability to smell rain, before it actually falls. The news is important as it tells us about the things happening in our cities, states as well as with our government. It keeps us in the know and the younger generation takes it for granted more than any previous generation. [Organize your writing: new idea, new paragraph] We are the Social Media and Internet generation. From my experience the news is a necessary intrusion of our solitude, only because at times news reports can be the fine line between life and death. For example the news may warn us of a predator in the area, it sometimes warns us about natural disasters that may be heading our way, as well as terrorist attacks.  We surely take the news for granted. Most of us do not watch it and are only informed because we are told by our parents and maybe through a fellow friend on facebook, Instagram or snapchat. [How might you act on these insights? How might your media consumption change?]

Our memory is merely our own perception of reality and this is why.

[State thesis in first sentence.] [Separate topic sentences with paragraphs.] Chabris and Simons build their case by first telling us who Dr. Tyson is along with his credentials. They then dived into a statement made by Dr. Tyson referring to something our then President said during an 9/11 speech and then what was actually stated by our previous President, Bush.  It initially seemed as if Tyson was just trying to elicit a negative response from the people and make It seem as though President Bush was against the Muslims. When in fact a reference was never made to “Our God” as Tyson had thought. They then concluded that Dr. Tyson had in fact recalled the speech incorrectly. [Separate topic sentences with paragraphs.] To further provide the readers with LOGOS the authors spoke about how memory failure correlates with witness testimony and also how confidence cannot measure accuracy. Simons proves himself to be a reliable source by pointing out that he himself served on the expert fall panel of the National Academy of Sciences where the panel released a report that recommended procedures to minimize the chances of false memory. It is a fact that when we recall our memories, we reconstruct it each time. [Analyze rather than summarize. How do the authors use the rhetorical triangle to convince the reader and how do they support their arguments?] Even President Bush himself mis-remembered what he saw during the 9/11 attack, stating that he specifically saw the first plane hit the north tower although he had not. Another example of mis-remembering is when Hilary Clinton stated that when landing in Bosnia she had to run from gun fire, which turned out to be false.  Clearly our Authors rely more on facts and studies than emotions.  [Separate topic sentences with paragraphs.] The top three picks chosen by the readers, I find quite effective. First we have the comment made my Dr. Tyson himself. In his comment he leaves two links, one in which he addresses the statement he said President Bush quoted. Tyson’s approach was very effective due to the fact that he who the article focuses on, so in turn all the readers are intrigued and surely wants to know what he has to say and he even goes as far as posting an actual email thread between him and an writer from “The Federalist”. The approach he uses I feel is the Ethical Appeal. I argue this because here I can see how he is defending his credibility and stating why he said certain things, as well as defending his “talks” stating that he prefers not to read off of a paper because it causes his audience to become uninterested. However, in my opinion [Analyze rather than express personal opinion.] it does seem to be a recurring issue of memory failure. For example when the journalist asked about a quote referring to school districts and he could not provide a source and claims that this is something that was “drawn” from his memory many years ago. [Separate topic sentences with paragraphs.] The second comment written by Keith Dow was actually pretty clever, not to mention comical. His points were valid and I would consider it a mix of pathos and ethos. The third comment written by Jacob Sommer is defending and essentially agreeing with the author’s and also speaking about his own experiences, this is an example of ethos along with paths and logos. The ranking of the NYT pick’s to me seem very off. The readers were able to better select the commentary who had more insightful things to say. The NYT top picks were very distasteful.